Micro-Fiction Revised: Someone To Love

I know what you are thinking, “It’s 100 words. Does it really need to be revised?” The answer is yes. Love at First Sight is my first experiment in micro-fiction and what I discovered is that when you are limited in story length you must choose your words carefully. Each one must play a role in telling the story. While I was satisfied with the first draft posted yesterday, something was just a bit off and it nagged at me all night. Finally I realized that my characters have an incredible back story that only I as the writer know. As you might guess, 100 words can be very limiting but I really wanted to convey the back story to the reader. So I attacked it again this morning. Here is my revised experiment in micro-fiction newly titled.

Someone To Love

She fell in love with him the day they met. She kept her distance watching from afar, strolling by, chatting with others to see if he’d notice. He did, but he was shy. She liked that about him as much as she liked his dark eyes and the way he tilted his head when she talked.

She came here wounded, as did he. Could they trust their broken hearts? Cautiously he approached her. A touch on the hand with a wet nose and a wag of the tail was all she needed. She belonged with him and he with her.


Follow this link to read the first version. Need a “pick me up” in your day? Visit your local animal shelter. Even if you can’t adopt a pet, your visit alone will brighten your day as well as theirs. Bring along a donation of food, treats, or a comfy bed to help with their care. In Virginia, visit Charlottesville SPCA where you will find the finest adoption counselors in the Commonwealth! They really care about their animals and the people who adopt them.

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About Susan Warren Utley

Susan Warren Utley is a wife and mother living and writing in the shadows of the Blue Ridge Mountains of Virginia. Her stories are inspired by the unexpected twists and turns of real life and by her muse, a feisty Jack Russell Terrier who occasionally answers to the name of Lucy. View all posts by Susan Warren Utley

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